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I said:
Girl,
Memories in a pill are my encapsulated dreams
and I dream of you when I can get any sleep.
But these Egyptian cotton sheets are eaten by closet moths
and this world has to get dark but I don't have to be cold.
Dark days keep insomnia near my arrhythmic heart,
so keep me warm by leaning a little closer to me.
Wherever we are,
in the Milky Way Galaxy,
on a back road asphalt highway playing a beat.
You can drive but we're taking my car,
so tell me what you think and let me find out who you are.

She said:
Hey boy,
I'd like to stay
and you know I'd like to play
but I'm going to Paris
and I'm going my own way.
I had a rough time in life
and I got stuck up a couple of times,
in muddy relationships and childhood trip ups
that weren't even my fault.
But you seem to listen
and you even seem to care
so if you're going my way
why don't you walk me there?

Then:
We walked together for a while.
No rhyme or reason, then they lost the beat when she moved away,
and they don't walk together anymore so he doesn't walk the same

They both thought:
I can't stand to lose our memories,
lose our dreams then lose you too,
so guess what I'm gonna do:

Something crazy!
Some bad!
Something I wanted for something we might have had...

I said:
But I don't want that to happen,
So let's youtube what we do cause I like to see you,
let's find another route,
let's do something wrong the right way this time so strong we're break away.
Fuck fate predestination we'll find another kind vacation...

She said:
Instead of moving apart?
Instead of losing my heart?
Is that a another joke? (you joke a lot)

But without your hair on my face when you kiss me
I feel like I'm missing an organ more important than an appendix.
So I guess I'll stay if you keep us moving.
This cities getting stale so let's dance on highway pavement
I see city light bulbs fractal style through a prism tear.
Authentic perspective can't change fate's directive,
but whatever we have to take let's take it together.
At least for tonight.
:iconthomasbisbee:
Maybe I shouldn't listen to music when I try to write poetry because when my Arcade Fire album ended and Audioslave started this poem/lyrics changed. Then Audioslave changed to Radiohead, Benny Benassi, Muse, and by the time Kid Cudi started I have no idea what I ended up with. Actually I ended up with this.

Does anyone want to make a few song? That would be awesome.

Oh and I know this is more pretty dialog than poetry OR lyrics. I'm trying to experiment with different styles of writing. But wutevah i dunt carenahmore.
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~SnappyIrides Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I like it. I can't put my finger on why, but i like it.
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:iconthomasbisbee:
Probably because you have a baby dragon on your finger :D
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~SnappyIrides Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
BAHAHAHAHA love it XD Its an adorable dp, huh?
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:iconthomasbisbee:
Haha, yes indeed :D
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~shannor Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Reading this, I have to admit, I can imagine it in a rap beat, though the timing and rhythm is tricky in places :)
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:iconthomasbisbee:
Yeah I feel ya. I don't know about you, but I don't seem to be able to write lyrics for music well without some kind of beat in the mind.

The beat comes first, ya know?
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*thelanyi Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this.
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~CecilyRoseMidnight Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really, really like this. I can tell that there is more meaning in this than just what it says, its like something people would have to interpret. I'm jealous you can write this well, writing that is intricate and unique is what I strive to do with my life (despite the instability of it.). Kudos to you for writing well! :)
I also feel I should let you know that I love how some of the poem rhymes, and some of it doesn't. (I don't know the word for that! I would say prose, but I'm not sure...)
In a nutshell, this is really good. It would be great as lyrics for music. :)
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:iconthomasbisbee:
I think people with unstable lives are often more interesting, so no worries! I'm the same way.
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